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The threesome walked side to side on a beautiful summer afternoon. They reached their favorite spot, an oak tree by a lake. Lila spread out the blanket and they all sat. Lila couldn閳ユ獩 help but look at the lake. It was beautiful. It was shimmering as the sun hit it at the exact angle.
How great would it be to have Jake kiss me by this lake?
No Lila he閳ユ獨 just your friend, remember?
But Lila hated being 閳ユΑust friends閳? She wanted more. She longed to feel the trace of Jakes fingers lightly stroke her hair. She longed for his embrace. She lightly ran her fingers across the lush, green grass next to her, imagining it was Jake閳ユ獨 soft blonde hair.
閳ユ窏ey guys guess what?閳?Jake said with his cute lopsided smile, 閳ユ窔 dumped Jamie last night?閳?br> 閳ユ穾nd your happy because?閳?Lila teased.
Lila pretended to be disappointed, but on the inside she was jumping for joy. Jamie was Lila閳ユ獨 worst enemy. Jake had been dating her for about 2 months. 2 dreadful months. Two
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nice keep going youre a really good writrer
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I like it... keep it up! You're a really good writer!
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your missing a little bit of quotation in there but i think its very good
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cool i give it 6 1/2
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"she stroked the grass, pretending it was hair"!?!? Do u do that?? The whole story line is kinda cheesy. . . but hey-I am gonna read the rest of it, so post away!!
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i agree its kinda cheesy, but its very good and you have the writers touch. its very realistic, and deep for how short this part is.
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good job i rate that a 100 im mean a 10 but if it was up to 11 i would give u 1,000
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